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    APPALOOSA

    April 26th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – I love westerns, and really wanted to like this one.  But a misplaced protagonist and a surprise stakes character left this one a few head short of a herd.

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who is your main character? – Viggo Mortensen’s character Everett Hitch

    What is he trying to accomplish? – Professional: Bring order to the town of Appaloosa. Personal: Protect his best friend Virgil. Private: This is just a theory here, but reconcile his emotional bond to Virgil while also trying to let Virgil go.  I may be reaching here, but there was a strong through line that pointed towards a homoerotic relationship that never went full BROKEBACK MOUNTAIN, but felt like it almost wanted to.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – Randall Bragg, an immoral (wait for it…) rancher.

    What happens if he fails? – Virgil and he will die.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – Everett and Virgil ride into town.  The town elders are desperate to get Bragg and his men under control, and they agree to Virgil’s demand that once hired, he is the law.

    Wanderer – After finding enough evidence, Everett and Virgil arrest Bragg and hold him for trial.  In the meantime, an attractive widow named Allison comes to town and Virgil falls for her.  Not being particularly good with women, he has to learn how to romance the classy widow.

    Warrior – Virgil and Everett must escort Bragg to another city where he’s to be hung.  Their train is ambushed by hired gunmen who have taken Allison hostage.  Bragg is released, and now Everett and Virgil set off to track him down and rescue Allison.  They must team up with the hijackers in order for all of them to survive the renegade Indians in the area.  Virgil must also deal with his feelings towards Allison when it becomes obvious that she and one of her kidnappers got particularly cozy…and she didn’t mind one bit.

    Martyr – Bragg is brought in to justice, however he gets a presidential pardon and become a “reformed” member of society.  Virgil and Everett go up against the kidnappers (now that they’re all out of danger and don’t need each other) and win the gunfight, though both are wounded.  With Bragg now out of the shadows, the town elders don’t particularly want Virgil and Everett around, and when Everett sees that Bragg and Allison are cozy (there’s that word again), Everett calls out Bragg for a gunfight in order to eliminate him so that Virgil won’t have to compete against Bragg for Allison’s affection.  Upon winning the duel, Everett rides off, leaving Virgil and Allison to presumably have a happy life together.

    AND, IN THE END…

    Here is another movie whose structure and character problems become very clear once looked at through the lens of Contour.

    Ed Harris did a wonderful, spare, job of directing APPALOOSA, however in the scripting he tries to have his cake and eat it too, splitting the protagonist arc between both characters Virgil and Everett.  It’s Virgil who seems to be making all the decisions, but it’s Everett’s narration we hear.   And even though Allison is introduced early enough and played as the stakes character, in the final showdown of Good Guy vs Bad Guy over Stakes, it’s Everett vs Bragg, over Virgil, and not Virgil vs Bragg over Allison as one might have expected.

    Virgil is painted as the alpha male, which is what attracts Allison to him in the first place.  He comes on very strong and seems to be placed as the protagonist, however he often loses our empathy by appearing weak, giggling like a schoolboy in love, and by pursuing a woman who basically will sleep with anyone she perceives as being able to protect her.  We’re not rooting for these two to get together.

    There is a core of an interesting story idea here that could have been explored more fully; the deputy as main character.  But if that’s the story you wish to tell, you have to tell the deputy’s story more fully than you do the sheriff’s. Such was not the case here.

    APPALOOSA comes out shooting, but once the protagonist arc gets split, the story starts misfiring as often as it doesn’t.

    – Jeffrey Alan Schechter

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    MONSTERS VS ALIENS

    March 29th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – Not a bad movie, but one with a very muddled central question.  And a few more comedy punch-up writers wouldn’t have hurt, either.   

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who is your main character? – Susan

    What is she trying to accomplish? – Professional: First half of the film she wants to get out of the government’s monster prison and be normal.  Second half it’s to destroy the aliens. Personal: Have her normal life back, although this gets a bit lost midway through. Private: Prove to herself how strong she is (although we only learn about this halfway through the movie).  Add up all of these and you have a confused central question as a result of her goal being a bit of a moving target.

    Who’s trying to stop her? – Ultimately, the alien leader.

    What happens if she fails? – Earth will be invaded by aliens and humans will be destroyed.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – Susan is bonked by a meteorite at the start of the film, taken from her family after she becomes the 50 Foot Woman, and thrown into a cell in a government facility.

    Wanderer – After an alien probe lands and goes on a rampage, Susan and the other monsters have to figure out how to use their monster skills to defeat it.

    Warrior – Susan is kidnapped by the alien leader and fights him in his ship.  Meanwhile, the other monsters stage a rescue.

    Martyr – Susan has returned to normal size and can escape the self-destructing ship, however she allows herself to become ginormous again to save her monster friends, who are also willing to martyr themselves for her.

    AND, IN THE END…

    MONSTERS VS ALIENS came this close to being a really good movie.  The 3D was a lot of fun and it’s interesting to watch as the technology gets embraced.  I can’t wait until the “adult” 3D movies start coming out.  

    There was nothing horribly wrong with the movie that a quick once over in Contour couldn’t have fixed.   Allies are introduced in the wrong place, the central question was poorly defined, the third act solution was presented haphazardly (cars used as skates…watch for it).  This was one of those movies that just need a little bit more to be great; a little better plotting, a little punchier humor, a little bit more character work.

    It’s done great business and deservedly so, but it was a little frustrating to watch because every last shortcoming was so fixable!  That being said, it’s easy to armchair quarterback a movie that one didn’t have to live with for several years in development.  

    – Jeffrey Alan Schechter


    RACE TO WITCH MOUNTAIN

    March 15th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – Not one honest laugh, real emotion, effective plot point, sincere character arc, or original idea.  Other than that, it was great.

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who is your main character? – Jack Bruno

    What is he trying to accomplish? – Professional: Keep the alien kids safe and get them back to their ship. Personal: Get Dr. Friedman (the sexy astro-physicist, not the balding gynecologist from Beverly Hills) to love him (alternatively, it might be to believe in something.)  Private: Not be the quitter he’s always been all his life.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – Henry Burke and the other super-secret government people who keep things super-secret.

    What happens if he fails? – Earth will be invaded by aliens.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – Jack’s literally an orphan (we find out that his parents died in a car accident.)  He’s an ex-con (but the nice kind), and drives a cab in Las Vegas where he gets no respect from anyone, while also living alone in a sleazy motel.

    Wanderer – After some ethereal kids jump into his cab, he tries to figure out who they are, where they’re going, and who’s trying to stop him.

    Warrior – Once he learns that they’re aliens he now fights to keep them safe and get them back to their spaceship.

    Martyr – Jack risks going back to jail (and his life) to rescue the kids who have been taken by the government scientists and who are about to have some non-specific procedure performed on them, get them to their ship, and defeat the alien assassin who wants to kill them.  Did I mention the alien assassin?

    AND, IN THE END…

    I love movies, I really do.  It is seldom that I see a movie so relentlessly bad that I find myself wishing for it to be over.   RACE TO WITCH MOUNTAIN represents the most creatively bankrupt storytelling I’ve seen in the past few years.

    Here is a movie with so little plot that it can be vomited out in one speech by the ethereal alien children.  Before and after that, the movie devolves into one repetitive chase scene after another.

    Structurally, the movie kinda sorta has everything in the right place, but it violates the rules of good storytelling (and good common sense) by purporting to be a chase movie that goes from point A to point B, yet the characters actually (and casually) return to where they started from (Las Vegas) two thirds of the way through the movie in order to pick up an ally character before hitting the road again.   It’s almost as if the filmmakers are daring us NOT to think that this is a whole lot of running around for nothing.  

    And another thing…the characters don’t even RACE to Witch Mountain!  They leave Las Vegas and then drive there, leisurely, in a Winnebago.  In fact, the trip to Witch Mountain is the only section of the film where they’re actually not racing around or being pursued.

    Add to this some really bad special effects and the worst flying saucer since PLAN 9 FROM OUTER SPACE, and you have a movie that is predictable, laughable, and so poorly structured that it watched like someone shot a first draft and slapped the Disney seal on it.

    C’mon guys…we can do better than this. 

    – Jeffrey Alan Schechter


    DEFIANCE

    February 9th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – An illuminating look at the tensions present amongst a totally displaced people.    

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? – Tuvia Bielski.

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: lead the Jewish survivors to safety.  Personal: keep his brothers together, as a family.  Private: hold onto the will to fight.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – The Nazis, Tuvia’s brother by questioning his leadership, Tuvia’s own self-doubts, and conflicts amongst the survivors.

    What happens if he fails? – Tuvia and the survivors will die.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – When the Nazis begin their persecution of the Jews, Tuvia and his two brothers lose not only their parents and homes, but their place in society.   They flee into the wilderness to avoid being caught and killed.

    Wanderer – When the brothers encounter other Jewish survivors, they agree to take them under their protection, necessitating raids on local farms for food and supplies.  Before long, Tuvia avenges his parents by murdering the local police chief responsible for their deaths, and the brothers begin attacking the Nazis in earnest.  However, resulting Jewish casualties cause Tuvia to reconsider this approach, which opens up a conflict between him and his brother, Zus: do they defy the Nazis by killing them, or by surviving in the forest? 

    Warrior – Everyone becomes a warrior of some form: Zus joins a company of Soviet partisans to take the fight to the Nazis.  Tuvia becomes the true leader of the survivors and they start rebuilding their lives, taking on new roles for the survival of the group and training to fight.  All of this is done in the face of sickness, a deadly winter and an ever-nearing enemy.  When the Nazis finally discover their position, everybody puts their skills to the test in the final fight for survival.

    Martyr – During their escape from the Nazis, Tuvia loses hope when they encounter a seemingly impassable marsh.  Tuvia’s youngest brother, Asael, inspires hope by being willing to risk almost certain death to cross it, believing that they can overcome anything if they work together.

    AND, IN THE END…

    I enjoyed the movie, but felt the third act wasn’t as powerful as it could have been.  That isn’t to say the final fight against the Nazis wasn’t awesome, or that the action was lacking in any way.  For me, it’s that the crossing of the marsh made for a weak MARTYR element, which diminished what followed.  

    First – the marsh just didn’t seem hard enough as an obstacle, and it felt less insurmountable than some of the challenges they’d already faced.

    Second – was there really a choice here?  In the circumstances, who wouldn’t choose a marsh over a squad of murderous Nazis?  I was unconvinced that this moment was powerful enough to restore Tuvia’s will to fight and survive.

    Third – during the final fight, Tuvia and one of his men are pinned under fire behind some trees.  Tuvia’s man finds a grenade and runs at a firing squad, getting shot two steps into his attack.  Clearly he was willing to die fighting rather than be hunted down, but if that mentality and determination is present, was crossing the marsh really something to lose faith about?

    I suppose the biggest point this raises for me is the ordering of obstacles in terms of difficulty, and how these obstacles operate.  I took away more from the failed grenade run than the marsh crossing, which I don’t think was the intent.

                                                                                               - Dan Pilditch



    NINE MONTHS

    January 25th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – In my eyes, a beautiful movie that gets me every time I watch it. Especially those two scenes in which Samuel watches the ultra sound tape and when he asks Rebecca to marry him in the hospital. Or is it the music that does it?

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? — Samuel

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: Figure out how to be both good in a relationship and a good (potential) father.  Personal: Samuel doesn’t want to change his stable life and doesn’t want to get married and have children.  Private: Not be someone his child will hate when he or she grows up.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – Rebecca

    What happens if he fails? — Samuel will stuck in an unstable, child-like likfe and lose the one woman who really loves him…as well as his unborn child..

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan –  Samuel is in a five-year relationship with Rebecca. She lets him know that she would like to get married and have children. He, however, says that he prefers having a stable life. They have everything they want: a good job, a good house and a nice sport car, why risk that? Samuel shows here that he is an emotional orphan.

    Wanderer — Rebecca tells Samuel that she is pregnant. He is shocked. It becomes clear that they have to make changes in their life.  He he has to sell the sports car, something he doesn’t want to do.  Also, his cat will have to go, something else he doesn’t want to do.  Samuel tries to learn the rules of how to leave his old life behind.  When Samule forgets an ultrasound appointment, Rebecca leaves him. 

     Warrior –  Samuel watches the video recording of the ultrasound of the baby and finally gets it: he is in love with the baby and feels ready to be fully committed to change. Samuel tries to convince Rebecca that he is ready to be a father. She doesn’t want to believe him. He asks his friend to arrange a meeting with her in the park but then hears that Rebecca had to go to the hospital.

    Martyr — In the hospital, Samuel tells her that he is sorry for his behavior and that he is a changed man. He tells her that he sold his sport car for a family car. He even says. “I don’t care about myself anymore, I only care about the baby.”

    AND, IN THE END…

    This is a movie about change. What Samuel really wants in the beginning of the movie is his current life. What he wants at the end of the movie is to be a father and having a family. He gets what he really needed and not what he wanted: he gives up his playful youthful life and becomes an adult.

    This fits very well into the idea of “what is your main character WRONG about at the start of the movie.”  The rest of the movie sets about answering this question.  In NINE MONTHS, Samuel is wrong about thinking that he can be a child forever.  Sooner or later, everyone has to grow up.

    –  André van Haren


    #5 With A Bullet

    January 16th, 2009

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    As of today, the downloadable version of Contour is the fifth most popular product being sold by The Writers Store in LA!  Whoo-hoo!  

    Now, if only we could do something about those damn brass fasteners…


    YES MAN

    January 15th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – Fun, but it felt like something was missing.

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? – Carl Allen.

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: become a ‘Yes Man’.  Personal: win over Allison.  Private: not spend his life alone.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – Minor obstacles along the way… mostly his own cynical self, but there’s no real antagonist. 

    What happens if he fails? – He remains alone.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – After being spurned by his wife, Carl lives alone, brushes off his friends and takes no joy in life.  He’s the ultimate cynic, saying “no” to every opportunity that comes his way.

    Wanderer – When Carl attends a ‘Yes Man’ seminar, he’s convinced to change his life around by saying “YES!” to every opportunity.  Carl’s skepticism is well founded.  Every time he says “yes”, something bad happens, but when he decides he’s done with the program, a dog nearly mauls him, so Carl now believes in the ‘covenant’: that bad things happen to those who say “no”!  So, he continues saying “yes” and remains a skeptic… until he meets Allison.

    Warrior – Encouraged, Carl starts saying “yes” to every opportunity – and it works!  He gets promoted, he and Allison begin dating… until Allison learns about the ‘Yes Man’ program and thinks Carl only agreed to their whirlwind romance because he felt he had to, not because he wanted to.

    Martyr – Carl risks everything to win Allison back, going so far as to cause a car crash to get Terrance Stamp to remove the ‘covenant’ – even though there isn’t one.

    AND, IN THE END…

    This was a fun movie, but the something that I felt was missing lies in the concept.

    YES MAN follows the ultimate cynic who starts saying “yes” to every opportunity that comes his way.  The obvious comedic potential lies in saying “yes” to weird opportunities (which he does), and then we have Jim Carrey, who acts funny wherever he is (which he does). 

    Many people likened YES MAN to LIAR LIAR, and found the latter to be superior.  I agree, because the concept for LIAR LIAR elevated everything comedically, instead of merely facilitating it.  Carrey plays a lawyer who doesn’t want to tell the truth, but has to, and there’s absolutely nothing he can do about it.  Fletcher has to deal with his worst nightmare (and ours): telling the truth all the time.

    In YES MAN, Carl throws himself into a bunch of outlandish situations.  Why?  Because he has to say “yes”.  Why must he say “yes?”  Because of that covenant thing… which doesn’t really exist.  Then why’s he really doing it?  Maybe it’s because he wants to change.  Would LIAR LIAR be funny if Fletcher wanted to tell the truth?    

    In my mind, this kind of comedy has to have a hero who absolutely doesn’t want to change, but doesn’t have a choice.  That’s the “something”.  LIAR LIAR had it.  I’m not sure YES MAN did.

                                                                                                                                                                                                    Dan Pilditch


    VALKYRIE

    January 14th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – A mostly solid tale about personal sacrifice… if you can forgive Germans speaking in American and English accents.

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? – Claus von Stauffenberg.

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: assassinate the Nazi power players and stage a government coup.  Personal: free Germany from its real enemy – the Nazis.  Private: fight for a cause that’s worth risking his and his family’s lives for.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – The Nazis and some members within Stauffenberg’s own coalition.

    What happens if he fails? – Stauffenberg and everyone he knows will be executed, including his family.  Germany will remain under the control of the Nazis, and any hope of a peaceful end to the war will be lost.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – While Stauffenberg is a solder thrust into bureaucracy, he’s alone because he questions the very cause he’s fighting for, while everyone around him is dangerously loyal.

    Wanderer – Stauffenberg is brought to a secret society that plans to assassinate Hitler.  They flesh out an amended operation “Valkyrie”, but to make it official Stauffenberg needs Hitler’s signature.  If that weren’t daunting enough, they must convince certain high-ranking Nazis to join their cause in order to succeed.

    Warrior – The plan is put into action, but when it fails (nothing ever goes according to plan), they’ve got to come up with another before they lose their opportunity.  After the deed is carried out, Stauffenberg and his men launch the coup, gradually assuming control from the Nazis.

    Martyr – After that plan fails (nothing ever goes according to plan), Stauffenberg and his men fight to the bitter end as the Nazis wrench back the control they momentarily lost.  

    AND, IN THE END…

    Valkyrie is about sacrifice.  What drives a person to become a martyr?  What does it mean to be a martyr?  These are all questions that should be asked about the heroes of the past if we’re to understand what they did, and why they did it.

    Did Valkyrie ask these questions?  Arguably, yes.

    I say ‘arguably’ because it’s a matter of opinion (and of historical knowledge).  We know that Stauffenberg and his team are doomed to failure before we see the movie, and one could argue that this robs it of any real dramatic tension: there’s no ‘will they/won’t they succeed’ dynamic. 

    One could also argue (as I’m more inclined) that this worked in the movie’s favor.  Since we know they’re going to fail, we can better identify with Stauffenberg because deep down, he knows that they’re going to fail too.  I would argue that Stauffenberg understood he was making the ultimate sacrifice before he even decided to fight the Nazis, and everything after that point is a window into the mind of a martyr.  

    Dan Pilditch


    AMADEUS

    January 10th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – An impressive film, can’t get enough of it. One of the best movies of the famous composer, Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart, ever made… in my opinion.

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? — Salieri

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: Prove that he’s a superior musician to Mozart.  Personal: Destroy Mozart’s and prevent him from getting a job at the court. Private: Punish God by destroying His creation, Mozart.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – God (according to Salieri)

    What happens if he fails? — Salieri will be a frustrated composer who will always feel that he’s a mediocre failure.

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan — Salieri is an unhappy child. He wants to be a great composer. His father, however, doesn’t allow him to study music and so, Salieri prays to God to make him a great composer.

    Wanderer — Salieri’s wish is granted, according to himself. His father dies and Salieri travels to Vienna to study music. Some years later, he becomes the court composer of Emperor Joseph of Austria. Salieri is happy being a famous composer, until he meets Mozart.  He recognizes in Mozart real genius, and tries to figure out how channel and control Mozart without letting on to the rest of the court that Mozart’s music is superior to his own. 

     Warrior – Salieri is angry at God because He gave not him, but “a monkey”, the bigger musical gift.  It is as if God is laughing at him!  From now on, he and God are enemies. He decides to destroy God’s creation by first ordering a beautiful requiem from Mozart and then kill him. During Mozart’s funeral he then will perform this requiem under his own name so the whole world will know that he, Salieri, is the greatest composer that ever lived!

    Martyr — As Mozart lies dying, Salieri helps him work on his Requiem, seemingly softening on and almost willing to give up his vengeance (the martyr moment), showing a real tenderness and appreciation to the man and his talent that he’s destroying.  Still, it’s not enough and Mozart dies.  Many years later, now an old man, Salieri tries to kill himself, asking Mozart for forgiveness. He adored Mozart, it was God he hated!

    AND, IN THE END…

    I have seen this movie so many times since it came out many years ago and never realized that it is in fact about Salieri and his struggle with God. It’s however great to see how Mozart does his tricks, like hearing a musical piece only once and then performing it even better than Salieri wrote it in the first place! And what about the scene in which he improvises on a given melody in the style of other composers; beautiful!

    – André van Haren


    WANTED

    January 8th, 2009

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    Overall Impression – (Thrilling action) + (brutal violence) x (visionary director) = (visually exciting movie that depressed the hell out of me.)

    THE FOUR QUESTIONS

    Who’s your main character? – Wesley.

    What’s he trying to accomplish? – Professional: learn how to be an assassin.  Personal: Kill the man who killed his father. Private: discover who he really is.

    Who’s trying to stop him? – At first it’s the members of the “Fraternity” by making becoming an assassin bloody difficult…and I don’t mean “bloody” in the British sense.  Next it’s Cross, the guy Wesley believes killed his father.  Next, it’s the guy who really caused his father to be killed..

    What happens if he fails? – He ends up being killed, one way or the other. 

    THE FOUR ARCHETYPES

    Orphan – Wesley grew up believing his father was dead.  He has a cheating girlfriend, no money in the bank, a dead-end job…even the guy’s ATM machine calls him names.

    Wanderer – Wesley tries to figure out how to become  an assassin.  He trains, gets bloodied, recovers, gets bloodied, recovers…until finally the lessons take hold.

    Warrior – Wesley goes out on his first mission and after being attacked, is sent to find Cross.  He tracks Cross to Europe and is almost killed, however he discovers a deeper conspiracy than what he first thought.

    Martyr – Wesley is willing to give up his own life to avenge his father, but the stronger martyr beat is given to another character who defends the code of the Fraternity at great cost.

    AND, IN THE END…

    I’ve seen a few movies over the years that are incredible pieces of moviemaking but leave me feeling afterwards that life is just a little bit less worth living.  SE7EN was one of them.   So was SILENCE OF THE LAMBS.  The imagery is so disturbing that it calls into question my humanity for enjoying (if that’s the right word) the experience of watching the movie.

    To this list I can now add WANTED.  Structurally it’s very sound, but with all that talent in front and behind the camera, and with all the innovation and creativity of its writers and director…is this a movie the world needs to see?  

    Sure…who am I to talk?  I’m the guy who wrote BLOODSPORT 2.  But I also wrote a wonderful humane dramedy called OUT OF THE WOODS for the Hallmark Channel.  I just hope that the creative forces behind WANTED also use their considerable skills for something that brings more light into the world.

    Damn…I’m beginning to sound old.

    – Jeffrey Alan Schechter